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deletedJul 18, 2022Liked by Maegan Heil
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I love how you used the parenthetical asides to added another dimension to the voice in your story!

And thanks for linking to that George Saunders post, I’m saving it for later.

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Never heard of the 200-word/50-unique word challenge. Interesting and well done. I like those odd precision writing/editing challenges. This is a good one.

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Little Tommy sounds like pure comedy gold. I legit lol'ed at that footnote. Looking forward to your next full piece!

Related to your submissions pain, I just found out about and subscribed to this newsletter called The Practicing Writer: https://erikadreifus.substack.com/.

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Love the last line. I didn’t even remember you’d already used those words before! Great final combination!

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I like the voice of the narrator. I could read more from this character. Novella? Thanks for sharing.

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You're so good at this challenge, Maegan. Love this one even more than the last. Had me all hot and bothered haha!

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Love. These.

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I bet this is such a difficult challenge! It works so well though, and I think what elevates it further is the use of punctuation. The exclamation marks getting used with more frequency and the capitals and italics, all work really well in providing an escalating pace within the whole thing.

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I was this many years old when I found out my elbow skin feels exactly like my penis does in my hand. From the bottom of my heart I thank you!

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Sep 8, 2022Liked by Maegan Heil

Unrelated: had to finally subscribe! Noticed overtime that were are both George Saunders / Chuck Palahnuik Substack superfans. Looking forward to future posts ✌🏼

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Feeling... traumatized.... o_0

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