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Joe G's avatar

Really enjoyed this poem. Love how you wrote about drinking and discarding a water bottle like you were describing a toxic relationship with a person who constantly drains you of energy. He was probably cheating with a Gatorade anyways. That bastard!

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Maegan Heil's avatar

Thanks very much for reading and commenting, Joe! Gatorade--ha, that's good!!

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Meg Oolders's avatar

Beautifully designed and executed, Maegen. Has me thinking about a few bottle/soul crushers of my own.

Fuck 'em. 💜

You rock. Hope you're surviving summer vacation. 🥂

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Maegan Heil's avatar

Thank you, Meg! As for summer--I'm hanging by a fishline!!

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Amran Gowani's avatar

Fun concept and well executed! Poetry is deceptively fun.

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Maegan Heil's avatar

Thank you, Amran! Who knew writing poetry could actually be an enjoyable experience??!!

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Dane Owen's avatar

I, too, have encountered the dasani bottles of the world. Beautifully done.

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Maegan Heil's avatar

Thank you, Dane! Now to finish cranking out that story that’s due...

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Dane Owen's avatar

I gotta figure out which one I want to send you guys 😂. I wish I was normal and wrote stories linearly instead of cobbling together 2, 3, 4 at a time

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Joe G's avatar

To hell with normal! Don't be afraid to jump around, collect bits and pieces, and put them together to see what happens. At least that is what I think Chuck told me when I asked him about writing linearly...

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Tom Braccini's avatar

Bravo! I really enjoyed this piece, Maegan.

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Maegan Heil's avatar

Thanks much, Tom! Coming from the Poem Master Himself, I will cherish this comment. 🥩

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Tom Braccini's avatar

More like the poem dabbler himself, haha. Thank you so much for the compliment!

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Jim Cummings's avatar

Wickedly clever!

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Maegan Heil's avatar

Thank you, Jim!! 🥩🥩

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Kris Mole's avatar

All about perspective.

Great stuff, Maegan.

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Maegan Heil's avatar

Isn't it though? (All about perspective.) Thank you, Kris, and I'm eager to get into that story of yours that popped up in my inbox today.

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Kris Mole's avatar

I hope you're well!

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Maegan Heil's avatar

Doing great! Summer’s always busy over here, but I’ve squeezed in a handful of trips to the beach, so I can’t complain. Hope you’re well too!

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Kris Mole's avatar

What more can you ask for?

All fine here too thanks. Melting in record temperatures in southern Spain, dreaming of being in Iceland.

Humans are never satisfied.

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Wil Dalton's avatar

I mean, at least Dasani’s got some crumpled company

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Maegan Heil's avatar

😂

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Maegan Heil's avatar

She shall transcend her container and live out the rest of her days as a PVC deck board overlooking the waves of Lake Michigan.

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Jack Everly's avatar

Bravo Maegan! I like how he sucks...WINK

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Randy Dong's avatar

Hi Maegan, this is Randy from New York Story Night.

Please shoot an email to randydongshi@gmail.com when convenient. I've got something I think you might find very interesting to discuss with you :)

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Rob Armstrong's avatar

I enjoyed this. Layout of poem was inventive and clever. thanks.

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Maegan Heil's avatar

Rob, thank you so much for reading and commenting.

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Maegan Heil's avatar

Glad you enjoyed it.

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Mariana's avatar

The feeling you create with the bottle (of water slowly running out) was excellent. Great work!

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Maegan Heil's avatar

Thank you so much, Mariana! Glad you enjoyed this.

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Brian D's avatar

Nice!

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Maegan Heil's avatar

Thank you for taking the time!

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Tasha Cookman's avatar

I don’t read a lot of poetry but I deeply enjoyed the cleverness of this

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Maegan Heil's avatar

Thank you, Tasha!

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Logan the Lobotomizer's avatar

Clever!

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Maegan Heil's avatar

Thanks Logan!

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Rabbi-Iblīs's avatar

Love me some good poetry. Thanks for this, really cool!

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Maegan Heil's avatar

Thanks Rabbi!

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Maegan Heil's avatar

I saw your MEAT request! I’d like to send you a mailer but I’m not sure about the address.

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Rabbi-Iblīs's avatar

The address is fine I think. I've ordered Chuck's last book using that address and the mail arrived. By the way, I'm okay with you not sending anything... I don't want to push you or anything. I'm just glad I'm subscriber to your substack.

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Maegan Heil's avatar

Great I’ll give it a shot!! :)

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Rabbi-Iblīs's avatar

Thanks

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Maegan Heil's avatar

Rabbi, I FINALLY shipped this today. Sorry it took so long I have been batting the flu and crabby kids. The postal clerk said 10+ business days. Hope it makes it to you!!

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Rabbi-Iblīs's avatar

Thanks a lot. This is so sweet of you.

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Rabbi-Iblīs's avatar

I've received your package today. It really put a smile on my face. Thank you so much.

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Maegan Heil's avatar

Oh I’m so glad!!

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