I love that, despite the strict story criteria, that you've managed to make something so lyrical. Excellent rhythm and escalating tension. If this is what you produce when you're stuck, I can't wait to see what you write when you're not in a rut!
This is an excellent thought. Anticipating something is nearly always better than receiving or experiencing the thing. Reverse anxiety. It ties to dopamine, the chemical of motivation.
I thought this was a good story in and of itself but then I realized it was a exercise and you had to use Georgie's words. This is just the kind of thing I need know. I'm working on a masterpiece (no pressure!) and am writing myself into one dead end after another... :( Thanks for this–Fresh Meat never disappoints!
Ralph, if you can hear this, you're drinking the wrong coffee. I can't tell you any more than that, I'm taking a big enough risk just contacting you. Good luck my friend.
I love some good use of repetition, I’ve found it gives a story a pulse.
(Also, nice avatar!)
Mmmm. Tension.
I like it. The rhythm. The repetition.
I love that, despite the strict story criteria, that you've managed to make something so lyrical. Excellent rhythm and escalating tension. If this is what you produce when you're stuck, I can't wait to see what you write when you're not in a rut!
This is an excellent thought. Anticipating something is nearly always better than receiving or experiencing the thing. Reverse anxiety. It ties to dopamine, the chemical of motivation.
Knob here is literal for door handle and not slang? Either way, turn it, get to Rob!
I thought this was a good story in and of itself but then I realized it was a exercise and you had to use Georgie's words. This is just the kind of thing I need know. I'm working on a masterpiece (no pressure!) and am writing myself into one dead end after another... :( Thanks for this–Fresh Meat never disappoints!
Well, I'm sure as hell tense after reading that.
Yum, Maegan. Thanks. 😊
A Penis Named Ralph, and Everything Else Judy Blume Taught Me https://www.purewow.com/books/judy-blume-ralph
Ralph, if you can hear this, you're drinking the wrong coffee. I can't tell you any more than that, I'm taking a big enough risk just contacting you. Good luck my friend.
You are the Queen of tension.
Love your stories.